MY Most Compelling Evidence 12

My most compelling evidence that I do support is I believe students after high school should take a “gap-year” after graduation. At this time it gives a student taking the “gap-year” gains valuable life experiences, such as, working or traveling, or just taking a breather that is refreshing from the hard core demanding studies of high school.  Students at this time taking the year off are able to figure out where their interest lies.  This I believe is strong evidence, because logically students who have graduated from high school are not sure what career paths they are gearing for in life.  Taking this break, with give them time to focus on life experiences they learned, such as, learning new traditions and cultures while traveling, choosing the correct career path they would like to pursue or just readily to commit themselves for the hard studies that college requires one to do. Since this will be my strongest evidence I will mention at the beginning of my essay and continue to reiterate throughout my argument.

I feel that my weakest evidence is students can not afford to go, yes there is finical aide available for many, grants private college loans with high interest rates, but generally this is not a reason many stay out for a breather.   This is weak because many students can save money but the expenses of colleges are high way too much for students to save in one year. All another reason being you can earn a certification trade in two years for less money. A great part of the argument being finding jobs out there are not easy but having a certification or some type of degree certainly can help achieve a great job. Taking this way can save many stressful decisions and expenses in the long run

My peer’s analyses

When analyzing my peer’s argument paper I found the writer to appear to be very weak to give supportive reasons for his general argument of his discussion.  Reading each paragraph the supportive reasons were weakened   by the writers unsurely of which position   stand they took of the argument they were trying to present. The argument that the writer was trying to present was not a persuasive for me to become interested to keep reading. Focusing on analyzing papers and reading through my text I can become a better writer while producing a effective argument paper if I take the time to learn more on the topic of my paper I am trying to present to be a persuasive while reading the tone is set strong if you can present enough supportive reasons of each main topic in each paragraph. They all have to be presented in organization fashion to tie in with your main thesis.

What I expect of peer review

         The process of peer review is to read each others work and carefully, make helpful comments, to make improvements on errors. We are using our judgment and knowledge within our scope of English we have learned. We are equally qualified to share opinions and comments with each other in order to improve our writing skills we gain negative and positive feedback to revise a finial draft to compose a great essay.

         For peer review to be a positive and effective part of writing you must receive a bias opinion that is not to be criticized unfairly. As a peer reviewer myself, I need to trust the judgment of my fellow peer group also in return they must have trust in my opinion. With all the positive and negative feedback that I receive for my peers through instructions on how to improve my grammar errors, run on sentences, verb agreements and more English rules to follow, we can compose a paper to turn into our instructor for a proper grade. As for myself, I some times forget to use the rules of English when writing, my mind seems to wander a lot, so having feedback helps when organizing my thoughts on paper.

        

         My strengths for being a peer reviewer comes from being a fair person on my judgment calls, I speak the truth always willing to share positive information with my fellow student to help them. My weakness as a peer reviewer comes from my difficulty with speech. English has always been a mountain I have been trying to climb, the task of knowing all the rules needs to stay and I need to apply them deeper in my mind.

         When writing I the first stages of my essays, I find a good process that helps me is all the feedback I receive from peers and my instructor, writing is made simple and now is becoming a fun project, I can use my mind to write and create a masterpiece of my own.

        

My Pattern of Errors

      IN my writings this was necessary long sentences. Many of these sentences appear to start in one direction and ends up some where else. Words are misplaced and phrases, Peers of mine caught a few fragments sentences. That were lengthy and the reader became exhausted.

      When analyzing a few of my papers I identified problems with verb endings such as A and an. Because of my problem with speech, this has become disruptive problem for me. The first essay I try to accomplish problems appeared quite frequently with the subject verb agreement.

    Turning my paper in to Ms. Spencer helped me, with her explanations of how I souid become more creative while writing, write from my heart. When Ms. Spencer edited my essays she helped me find additional errors that 2 could not find on my own.

     Reading the essay out loud became a tool for me this year, I heard a lot of errors while reading my own essays. Proof reading over each sentence and high lighting mistakes become a long process. Large categories of sentence punctuation errors were very noticeable when peers read over my paper only let me blind to see my own errors.

      I know now try to start with the error that is confusing to me the most, subject verb agreement and I a list of errors as I spotted them  and try to shape my paper as I use a English guide book when I revised my papers. I struggle a lot this year but the English tutor and Ms. Spencer helped me become more experience at listening and reading my papers only to find my own errors. 

I’m lovin it, “McDonalds “

           Why are McDonald’s sales doing so well?  With the great advertisements, this company has came up with as a lot to do with it and how the company is willing to change to accommodate the need for tend in different areas of sales. Take the new advertisement of their coffee; you can still buy coffee for one dollar at McDonalds. McDonald Advertise about their new McCafe’ in every chain of their stores. They have upgrade a new café to sell various coffee choices, to compete with the new tend of coffee drinkers that are hitting Starbucks. McDonald advertisements are not just in their food restaurants but in the news, billboards, park benches, the radio, trying new methods to compete with the other fast food chains. 

         I found McDonalds, an interesting company to do my essay about for several reasons, first being, since I was a kid McDonalds has always been the greatest outing as a family we did on Saturday nights. I find McDonalds to be easy to write about due to the big advertisements and the popularity of the fast food chain. I did not choose any advertisements from the list due to McDonalds pop into to head and I wanted to write about something I love, McDonald’s restaurant. McDonalds has always show young and adults it is the largest fast food chain restaurants and always a great retreat to eat at, would it be their drive thru or sit down in their cozy style areas, you can always enjoy your meal, eating McDonalds.

Reflections of a Writer

I reflect back doing my first blog and I have realized I was not focusing on enough on the most critical part of getting a readers attention.

What is the blogs post title? When writing most of my blogs I feel I had some creativtiy running through my brain. When it was time to give my blog a title, a mental block stuck in my head.

As this year progresses I have found out that the title of your blog creates a vision of what or who it is that you are looking for or talking about.

I find that during our peer groups when we work on work sheets, the process becomes a bit overwhelming but I need to get a firmer grasp on the proper way to write blogs and papers,

With the constructive feed back of peers my growth in writing has become an easily task to achieve. At with the feed back of your peers I found many grammar errors or simple glitches I over looked. With the constructive feed back and criticism not only from peers, also from Ms. Spencer, to me it has this meant that some one was not just reading my work, but analyzing it with the perspective of being a writer. Over the months giving constructive criticism was important to me as well, when I first started I didn’t want to hurt anyone’s feelings, but now I realize this class helps us to consider our dialogue when writing, point of view structure and be very careful with our grammar.

To accomplish many of these goals in writing I have learned I need to become focused and find a quite place to let my mind flow with wisdom of creatively. I feel my writing can still be improved, but I have changed with in and become a stronger writer. I now feel great about writing, I like it.

Carson's

    I read Cynthia blog  the effect of this advertisement was right to point.I  feel instead of sperating gender, purpose and  Audience every sentence could be  blended into  a straight sentence. I feel she persuaded her audience a great deal to agree with her add. Cynthia took  a lot of time to do research and effectively send the message that she intended to her audience.    
    On my advertisement I feel that I had great communication with my  the persuasion  of  shopping  Carson's.   The area that  needs work,Is more  information of what Carson's has to offer the consumer. My purpose  was of course trying to sellthe  store I feel is the best place  to shop at and all  the deals are amazing. From my own personal experiences of  shopping at Carson's i havre found there are many name brands to choose form. The advertisement deals with all genders and its targets the audience interests. The image i am trying to effectively to get across is more consumers to shop at Carson's.