Assignment 15

Looking back on the beginning of this year, when I entered this English class my experience of writing or understanding the English structure of writing was at a o level.

During my high school years assignments never expected us to produce term papers.  As such, we were in special education, focusing mainly learning writing paragraphs was is far as we accomplished.  When I registered for this class I was in hopes to learn a whole new world of expressing my ideas on paper. Upon taking this class it seemed so difficult to tack so many weaknesses, not knowing proper format, not knowing how to organize a essay, even write a great thesis was hard.  I find as a example my argument  paper if I keep going over it reading it several times I can realize and stop most grammar errors, yes some slip by me But I have tried. Going to the English tutor this year has helped me a great deal, as well as, my professor .Strengths are few in my case ,but as least I can omit many and willing to try to tackle them. My greatest strength I feel is my willing to try to accomplish a difficult subject that really I never had any clue of the main concept of what English class consisted of.  I found to learn many new way to prepare an essay, outlining, preparing drafts, revisions and my main goal is to prepare a thesis.  I need to keep reinforcing all what I have discussed in class , what I have taped in sessions keep rewinding as I continue to write  but I will continue to absorb every thing in my mind. Yes I have accomplished many new ways of writing And I am very proud of what I have learned, yes they can improve but with the help of tutoring and professors to guide me writing can be tackled easy for me soon.

Assignment 14

      I feel the essay I chose taking the a “gap-year” can prove to be the strongest thesis that I produce in all of my drafts, yes I feel I could improve it to be a stronger claim to voice my argument, but I feel this thesis Was the best one I created because I took enough time to focus on my argument. I see looking though my draft need to improve some strengths of my arguments to some of my response to my claims and I need to try to organized the essay in a better well format so upon reading the paragraphs the reader can see a better transition of words from one paragraph to the next which will help readers under stand the support to my claims of argument. With the reader to under stand my claims I can tie my conclusion with my beginning paragraph in order to complete a well  structured argument essay.

Assignment 13

My most enjoyable essay was to write and revise was taking a “gap-year” after upon graduation of high school.   When I entered college I was not fully aware of my career path like most young students fresh out of high school.  Know I believe, after three years of hard studies no time to my self taking the break would have guided to a different level. My mind wants me to go to different places with different learing experiences that I might of have chosen a great career path in. The first reason taking the break can help one with a personal learning style  One has time within that year to focus on their paths they chose to go, Now I am taking classes that do not even pertain to my major I have chosen for myself.  Within this time I can be refreshed ready to make a long hard commit to attend the college of my choice.  Within this time frame I can focus on me who, where I want to go, this is me.                 

MY Most Compelling Evidence 12

My most compelling evidence that I do support is I believe students after high school should take a “gap-year” after graduation. At this time it gives a student taking the “gap-year” gains valuable life experiences, such as, working or traveling, or just taking a breather that is refreshing from the hard core demanding studies of high school.  Students at this time taking the year off are able to figure out where their interest lies.  This I believe is strong evidence, because logically students who have graduated from high school are not sure what career paths they are gearing for in life.  Taking this break, with give them time to focus on life experiences they learned, such as, learning new traditions and cultures while traveling, choosing the correct career path they would like to pursue or just readily to commit themselves for the hard studies that college requires one to do. Since this will be my strongest evidence I will mention at the beginning of my essay and continue to reiterate throughout my argument.

I feel that my weakest evidence is students can not afford to go, yes there is finical aide available for many, grants private college loans with high interest rates, but generally this is not a reason many stay out for a breather.   This is weak because many students can save money but the expenses of colleges are high way too much for students to save in one year. All another reason being you can earn a certification trade in two years for less money. A great part of the argument being finding jobs out there are not easy but having a certification or some type of degree certainly can help achieve a great job. Taking this way can save many stressful decisions and expenses in the long run

My peer’s analyses

When analyzing my peer’s argument paper I found the writer to appear to be very weak to give supportive reasons for his general argument of his discussion.  Reading each paragraph the supportive reasons were weakened   by the writers unsurely of which position   stand they took of the argument they were trying to present. The argument that the writer was trying to present was not a persuasive for me to become interested to keep reading. Focusing on analyzing papers and reading through my text I can become a better writer while producing a effective argument paper if I take the time to learn more on the topic of my paper I am trying to present to be a persuasive while reading the tone is set strong if you can present enough supportive reasons of each main topic in each paragraph. They all have to be presented in organization fashion to tie in with your main thesis.

What I expect of peer review

         The process of peer review is to read each others work and carefully, make helpful comments, to make improvements on errors. We are using our judgment and knowledge within our scope of English we have learned. We are equally qualified to share opinions and comments with each other in order to improve our writing skills we gain negative and positive feedback to revise a finial draft to compose a great essay.

         For peer review to be a positive and effective part of writing you must receive a bias opinion that is not to be criticized unfairly. As a peer reviewer myself, I need to trust the judgment of my fellow peer group also in return they must have trust in my opinion. With all the positive and negative feedback that I receive for my peers through instructions on how to improve my grammar errors, run on sentences, verb agreements and more English rules to follow, we can compose a paper to turn into our instructor for a proper grade. As for myself, I some times forget to use the rules of English when writing, my mind seems to wander a lot, so having feedback helps when organizing my thoughts on paper.

        

         My strengths for being a peer reviewer comes from being a fair person on my judgment calls, I speak the truth always willing to share positive information with my fellow student to help them. My weakness as a peer reviewer comes from my difficulty with speech. English has always been a mountain I have been trying to climb, the task of knowing all the rules needs to stay and I need to apply them deeper in my mind.

         When writing I the first stages of my essays, I find a good process that helps me is all the feedback I receive from peers and my instructor, writing is made simple and now is becoming a fun project, I can use my mind to write and create a masterpiece of my own.

        

My Pattern of Errors

      IN my writings this was necessary long sentences. Many of these sentences appear to start in one direction and ends up some where else. Words are misplaced and phrases, Peers of mine caught a few fragments sentences. That were lengthy and the reader became exhausted.

      When analyzing a few of my papers I identified problems with verb endings such as A and an. Because of my problem with speech, this has become disruptive problem for me. The first essay I try to accomplish problems appeared quite frequently with the subject verb agreement.

    Turning my paper in to Ms. Spencer helped me, with her explanations of how I souid become more creative while writing, write from my heart. When Ms. Spencer edited my essays she helped me find additional errors that 2 could not find on my own.

     Reading the essay out loud became a tool for me this year, I heard a lot of errors while reading my own essays. Proof reading over each sentence and high lighting mistakes become a long process. Large categories of sentence punctuation errors were very noticeable when peers read over my paper only let me blind to see my own errors.

      I know now try to start with the error that is confusing to me the most, subject verb agreement and I a list of errors as I spotted them  and try to shape my paper as I use a English guide book when I revised my papers. I struggle a lot this year but the English tutor and Ms. Spencer helped me become more experience at listening and reading my papers only to find my own errors. 

I’m lovin it, “McDonalds “

           Why are McDonald’s sales doing so well?  With the great advertisements, this company has came up with as a lot to do with it and how the company is willing to change to accommodate the need for tend in different areas of sales. Take the new advertisement of their coffee; you can still buy coffee for one dollar at McDonalds. McDonald Advertise about their new McCafe’ in every chain of their stores. They have upgrade a new café to sell various coffee choices, to compete with the new tend of coffee drinkers that are hitting Starbucks. McDonald advertisements are not just in their food restaurants but in the news, billboards, park benches, the radio, trying new methods to compete with the other fast food chains. 

         I found McDonalds, an interesting company to do my essay about for several reasons, first being, since I was a kid McDonalds has always been the greatest outing as a family we did on Saturday nights. I find McDonalds to be easy to write about due to the big advertisements and the popularity of the fast food chain. I did not choose any advertisements from the list due to McDonalds pop into to head and I wanted to write about something I love, McDonald’s restaurant. McDonalds has always show young and adults it is the largest fast food chain restaurants and always a great retreat to eat at, would it be their drive thru or sit down in their cozy style areas, you can always enjoy your meal, eating McDonalds.

Reflections of a Writer

I reflect back doing my first blog and I have realized I was not focusing on enough on the most critical part of getting a readers attention.

What is the blogs post title? When writing most of my blogs I feel I had some creativtiy running through my brain. When it was time to give my blog a title, a mental block stuck in my head.

As this year progresses I have found out that the title of your blog creates a vision of what or who it is that you are looking for or talking about.

I find that during our peer groups when we work on work sheets, the process becomes a bit overwhelming but I need to get a firmer grasp on the proper way to write blogs and papers,

With the constructive feed back of peers my growth in writing has become an easily task to achieve. At with the feed back of your peers I found many grammar errors or simple glitches I over looked. With the constructive feed back and criticism not only from peers, also from Ms. Spencer, to me it has this meant that some one was not just reading my work, but analyzing it with the perspective of being a writer. Over the months giving constructive criticism was important to me as well, when I first started I didn’t want to hurt anyone’s feelings, but now I realize this class helps us to consider our dialogue when writing, point of view structure and be very careful with our grammar.

To accomplish many of these goals in writing I have learned I need to become focused and find a quite place to let my mind flow with wisdom of creatively. I feel my writing can still be improved, but I have changed with in and become a stronger writer. I now feel great about writing, I like it.

Carson's

    I read Cynthia blog  the effect of this advertisement was right to point.I  feel instead of sperating gender, purpose and  Audience every sentence could be  blended into  a straight sentence. I feel she persuaded her audience a great deal to agree with her add. Cynthia took  a lot of time to do research and effectively send the message that she intended to her audience.    
    On my advertisement I feel that I had great communication with my  the persuasion  of  shopping  Carson's.   The area that  needs work,Is more  information of what Carson's has to offer the consumer. My purpose  was of course trying to sellthe  store I feel is the best place  to shop at and all  the deals are amazing. From my own personal experiences of  shopping at Carson's i havre found there are many name brands to choose form. The advertisement deals with all genders and its targets the audience interests. The image i am trying to effectively to get across is more consumers to shop at Carson's.   

"Red Hot Ferrrai"

   By Choosing to drive a hot Red Ferrari you can image your self and Feel the kind of car you be driving know. Would it be a mere sports car or a red classy hot mama as this. This appealing eye Cather of a greet sports car puts many brand name American cars to shame. Xlo Matter what your age is we can find the light car to fit your style. All these  adds of different classes of Ferrari help reassure that Ferrari are one of the top market cars out their. Be a high class driver. Image your self behind a red hot mama Ferrari. Sitting on our finest quality leather seats pushing your foot against the paddle only to realize that the Ferrari sports car is where its at. 

                                                              

Revisions of my paper?

  I have struggled to produce an effective essay. For instance, looking at my draft, I need to revised half of my work. listening to my classmates, teacher, and friends criticism of my work has become valuable in sight the revision process become a little easier for me.
  
  when revising my paper I made changes to the content, and organized paragraphs differently. Rereading my draft several times, I found errors that I could identify. In paragraphs, I had problems writing the main idea to the topic of each paragraph. My focus on the main ideas in each paragraph was lost in my thoughts. I realized I needed to expand my thoughts, make my paragraphs shorter they were too lengthy I was losing readers attention. 
  
  I sat down to rethink my draft, I got a big picture in my mind. I was determined to complete this assignment in which the teacher wanted it to be completed.
  
  I organized my thoughts in paragraphs, focusing on the main idea in each. I tryed to complete a well structured sentence and clean the grimmer back to front in the sentences.
   
  I believe with a lot of work and critical thinking my writing can improve. I can make stronger essays and better paragraphs with rereading and breaking down each paragraph at a time, the weakest part of my essay was getting lost in thoughts.

Writing A "good," Effective paper

   What makes a "good"paper. To me, the difference between a  C paper and a A paper is good capitalization and punctuation when needed in writing, make sure your information is clear to your reader and arranged and  connected properly. Sentences must be  concise to grab your readers attention.

     I feel the hardest for myself, to focus on the  introductory paragraph. I  have found myself  over and over rewriting and thinking, I need to capture my readers attention. This part seems to be the most difficult for me. I always keep  in my  mind my thesis statement needs to be in boldface. 
     
     Having a "good" introduction paragraph holds your readers attention.  You must focus on the topic in each paragraph making sure it is concise to the point. Clearly making each paragraph connected as a whole in body in your paper.
     
     With practice and a lot of hard work this year,  I  will be able to achieve a " good" effective paper. 

Generating ideas,

    I believed I started generating a lot  of my ideas when I was young. Many  times sitting or playing in our back yard I dreamed about becoming a super hero like spider man. I  remember in my head of always loving to stretch different poses him many  going from different buildings or landing on roof tops. When  I stretch ideas in my head  I can  dream up stories about who that person I want them to become.
    I can relate to a lot of my stretching to generating my ideas for writing my papers. I have explored different worlds, seen people in different images of who I wanted them to be I feel you can generate  ideas in many forms. I believe you can work with comes natural to you and want helps you create ideas in your mind. 
                         Here is a example of a super  hero  that i stretch to wright a paper.

                                                             
                                                         
                                                             

why am I Taking English 101

  A major goal in my life is becoming a school teacher. I need to develop and build better skills in my writing. I would like to build my self-confidence in my ability to effectively write papers. I feel taking English 101 I will learn to use proper sentence  structures, and punctuations along with appropriate language  are major stages of writings process that I need  to develop. this course will be challenging for me, with studying and guidance I will learn and be able to demonstrate a proper for mat of writing a paper.